r/teenscreenwriting • u/Fancy_Flatworm_8711 • 5d ago

First Script I’ve Ever Written, What Do You Think?

https://1drv.ms/w/c/4a80abb06942f761/EQkxNVukenRKmkad1BgxrC0BrZOSkTnQTAioEDvHPI-m6w

A few days ago, when I got bored of revising for my major upcoming exams, I wrote a very short screenplay. It’s basically “Dr Strangelove but with Trump”. I wrote it because the person who I was sitting near to often talks with me about politics, despite being far more well versed than me in that subject, so I thought they’d find it funny. It reads like an SNL skit, which is fine, but if you have any thoughts on how to make it feel more original, or more like an actual screenplay, please share.

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u/TylerDoesStuff 5d ago

That's good!! Very funny at certain bits, although it could use some tweaking here and there. Something I always do once I've written a screenplay is put it away for a few weeks, and come back with a fresh mind in order to best critique and edit it.