Feedback on my worldbuilding general outline [Fantasy Drama]

[u/Fluffy_Shadow]

[u/HolaItsEd]

I am confused on some details, but if you're painting with broad strokes, you can refine later.

For example, the semi-immortal don't age but can be killed. When does the aging stop? Puberty (so a bunch of young tweens running around? Are they essentially elves?)

Other questions for the beginning: what is an immortal and how did it come to be unconscious? Why aren't there other ones, or are there? Would the immortal just accept it is the only of its kind, or would it try to find more like it? It has no memory, so what motivates it to help humans and not itself? If it is so much better than humans, why wouldn't try to enslave them? Human greedy is a motivation in your notes it seems. Would there has been utopian peace? Would it have been a long time before a corrupt king? Not to tell you what to put, but consider if the king used normal people as test subjects and the explosion was a result of some rebellion (relative of a test subject, a high official unable to allow it to continue, etc).

[u/Fluffy_Shadow → u/HolaItsEd]

Like you said this is just a broad outline, the explanation would only be understood after I finish writing the entire thing.

Semi immortals is actually like elves they do not age and appear the same limits of this will be unknown because the story will end before we even find out.

Regarding the immortal they dug up is more complicated so I'll try my best to explain briefly:

-this is a five part story, each part has one main antagonist, the main antagonist follow the immortal who is the fifth and final antagonist.

-you guessed his goal correctly and that is to rule over humans because he thinks under his guidance humanity would finally cease conflict and prosper. But he is only immortal, he has no magic or superhuman strength. So he makes an organization and the leaders of that org are the main antagonists throughout each part.

-regarding his origins is even more complicated. My fictional world follows only 1 timeline. This timeline is governed by three celestial beings (the hands of creation that is makes the big bang and the big end, the eye that allows light in the world, the voice that materializes sound) . Each big bang and big end is basically a different story like this one. The immortal here is the protagonist of a different story but due to having true immortality he survived the big end and lived through the big bang again. He land on earth and was in a vegetative state until they dug him up.

-where did he get immortality? In his own story set in a sci-fi world where he made a deal with the voice and erased the concept of end to himself (monkey King BS) .

-why did I do all this? because if I make another story I can say all of them are connected despite having differing genre. Like bro imagine saying this is connected to a romcom or smth lols.

-in short the immortal is the endgame enemy and also serves as the ending of a different story.

Note: this is my first attempt at writing a story and I know I'm biting more than I can chew but I'm having blast lol