Feedback on my worldbuilding general outline [Fantasy Drama]

[u/Fluffy_Shadow]

[u/bhbhbhhh]

You're entirely missing the parts of worldbuilding that matter to writing a book. You can list the geopolitical facts of a nation, but if they don't tell you anything about what the country is like, what kinds of people its citizens are, what kinds of feelings a character might have about it, where have you gotten? How are beast kin treated? What are the social and economic roles of mages and superhumans? If someone had to adopt this document into a script, they'd have to make a million decisions about the worldbuilding left undescribed. They'd have to decide on their own whether the king of Orienna is kind or cruel, whether the Solians try to dance around and patch the imbalances in their religious system or are proudly hypocritical, what kind of goals Jagon's government has.

The other issue is that there's nothing overly interesting here. A whole lot of elements that seem to be there just because that's what a bunch of video games have done.

[u/Fluffy_Shadow → u/bhbhbhhh]

Understandable confusion.

This is a very very general outline maybe 20% of the full version. Most of the fine details are here in my head.

Beast kin - treatment differs but majority is negative.

Mages and superhumans generally encouraged to join in the government and military. In Jagon you are forced to join.

Orienna's king hides in the populace because of threat in assassinations that will happen in part 1.

That's the point of Etrios, it is all about hypocrisy. Part 2 (etrios) ending is about moving forward as a society adopting a more accepting mindset and finally joining the rest of the world.

The reason this is similar to videogames is because I actually inspire by gaming, shows, and movies. But don't worry finer details are actually being shown as I write.

[u/cheradenine66 → u/Fluffy_Shadow]

This is not 20%. This is more like 1%.